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Katie Estes
Starlite Member
Username: Southernl3elle
| | Posted on Monday, May 01, 2006 - 12:10 am: | 
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There’s something lingering
Deep within the smoldering
Life I once lived before
That needs to be restored
Emotions are reemerging
That seems to be urging
For the life I once lived before
Desperate to be restored
When I left you behind
We were still entwined
With a silent ardor
That we couldn’t ignore
But the life I lead
Can never be buried
I go on without you
In regret that I can’t undo
Chorus
The mistake I made
The roads I aimlessly take
Where we gradually fade
Then fall and break
Never want to unbind
I just want to rewind
And relive the splendor
Of us together
There’s something awaking
The sparks are igniting
A feeling felt before
That needs to be restored
There’s passion burning
Enticing me to be daring
To revive the life I once lived before
Desperate to be restored
I strained your heart
To the extent, I’m sure
But to feel you again
I’ll forever savor
Though the promise I made
Cannot be dismayed
I go on without you
In regret that I can’t undo
Chorus
If only I could rewind
And fill in missed time
I’d never say goodbye
Not like I did before
Several times
If only I could rewind
Rewind back to you and I
Chorus
-Katherine N. Estes |
Jch64
Starlite Member
Username: Jch64
| | Posted on Friday, June 16, 2006 - 07:12 am: |
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This is good, but it seems ( and this happens to me ) to be bigger in ambition than practicality. By that I mean that the idea, the words used, and the form in which it is all put together though wonderful would be tough to put to music. The complexity would make it tough to do so. There are some great lines in their but some that seem forced to rhyme. Otherwise they are great words, good idea and original but maybe too complex in it's form now. Just a thought, try some variations off of it in lighter structure to see if that helps. Suggestion only. |
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