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Evil_monkeyman
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Username: Evil_monkeyman
| | Posted on Tuesday, July 25, 2006 - 07:33 pm: | 
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Heya all, I'm new to this site, But I have a few Songs/poems/general thoughts of nothingness, so I thought I'd post some up, see what people think 
So here goes, Here's one I wrote a while ago, My first one methinks (I havent been writing for long)
Its Gone
(intro)
Verse 1
Inevitablility consumes us all,
It maliciously watches and laughs as we fall,
Insatiable in its lust for pain,
(It) induces agony so hard to sustain,
Relentless in its abismal quest,
It enlist the help of hate and detest,
With assistance from it's new found "Friends"
It seeks out hope and makes it end,
Chorus:
Inevitability,
It had to be you,
You made it diminish,
You made me feel blue,
Verse 2
As it approaches, emotion change starts,
This symbiotic creature combines with her heart,
Constricting the flow of compassion and care,
(and) Banishing it to an inpenatrable lair,
In tight control of it's reluctant host's soul,
Synthesising hate to help with it's goal,
(with) It's newly made minions on beckon call,
No longer is this evil force small,
Chorus:
Inevitability,
It had to be you,
You made it diminish,
You made me feel blue,
Verse 3
Armed to the teeth with pain and dismay,
It's redundant host's corpse is then thrown away,
The love never freed, her heart turns to ice,
But for inevitability, this will not suffice,
Bridge:
We could've had something but fate intervened,
You cant avoid whats inevitable and its evil team,
Chorus:
Inevitability,
It had to be you,
You made it diminish,
You made me feel blue,
(solo)
Bridge 2:
I'm hereby conceeding,
Cause it's gone, (gone)
It's gone, gone, gone, (its gone)
My warm blood freezes,
as she fades away,
Chorus:
Inevitability,
It had to be you,
You made it diminish,
You made me feel blue,
(Outro)
By Adam Ralph 31/05/05
Thanks for reading
(Message edited by evil_monkeyman on July 25, 2006) |
Razorbladediary
Starlite Member
Username: Razorbladediary
| | Posted on Thursday, July 27, 2006 - 11:03 pm: |
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sounds good |
Mik3y
Starlite Member
Username: Mik3y
| | Posted on Monday, August 07, 2006 - 01:41 am: |
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I can hear the double kick already :D
Michael william James
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Babyc1034
Starlite Member
Username: Babyc1034
| | Posted on Saturday, September 09, 2006 - 06:08 pm: |
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OKay I love it but the only thing is I think that you should make it so that the chourus goes twicelike
Inevitability,
It had to be you,
You made it diminish,
You made me feel blue,
Inevitability,
It had to be you,
You made it diminish,
You made me feel blue,
I thinkn that if you did that and then made the second part you know whth the feeling it would b hot |
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