Bronze Dragon (Michaelwalker)
|Posted on Wednesday, June 25, 2003 - 02:40 pm: ||
This area is designated for those of you who would like to try the Form challenge for the week (or a previous week if you’d like), but are not sure whether or not you did the form correctly. Simply submit your entire poem here (no link is necessary, these are works in progress) and we, the challengers and administrators collectively, will give you guidance on the form, or, if you’ve done it perfectly, we’ll say so! This will hopefully give you a risk-free forum to obtain advice on your poem for the Form Over Substance challenge before you post it and submit it in the challenge thread.
Aka Bronze Dragon
Diana Randall (Diana)
|Posted on Monday, August 18, 2003 - 01:08 am: ||
Title: The Muses and Me
The form is Terza Rima. One of the things I would like to know is if I used the following words in the correct context: deigns and trancendental, are they used correctly in the poem. Please check the rest of the poem for any other mistakes.
"Imagination rules the world, let the universe speak to you." Diana
"Some words just have more poetic pull on your heart than others, honor that, your heart is speaking to you." Skybrush
pedro b. bernaldez (Pedro_bernaldez)
|Posted on Monday, October 27, 2003 - 01:25 pm: ||
I'm Pedro, a neophyte: very, very green but eager to learn. I'm not lying but simply laing LOL. Please help wit this lai.
Come sit with me, please
and look at the trees
The color of leaves
just like your kisses
Oh lovely mistress
with golden tresses
On my bended knees
offer you my pleas
With your long silence
comes painful unease
So with passing breeze
I¡¯ll blow you a kiss
Bronze Dragon (Michaelwalker)
|Posted on Monday, October 27, 2003 - 06:50 pm: ||
Thank you for your interest in the lai. Your syllabic count is impeccable, but the rhyme you use is very loosely constructed. Tighten up the rhyme scheme and you'll have a perfect lai!
Sharon Peeples (Pianolove)
|Posted on Tuesday, March 16, 2004 - 11:11 am: ||
I'm sorry Michael but I posted this in the wrong forum, so forgive my repetition. I want to know if this write qualifies as free verse. It does have a metrical cadence, but being a musician I find it difficult NOT to write in that manner. AFRAID OF THE LIGHT http://www.thestarlitecafe.com/poems/82/poem_616308.html
|Posted on Thursday, July 21, 2005 - 10:00 pm: ||
Title: Politically (in)correct
Until Somebody says differently, I am going to call this one, the double reverse word acronym
|Posted on Monday, March 13, 2006 - 05:47 pm: ||
I have never tried metered form befoe so bare with me.
He was stern
To clash , yet, you could learn
It was e nough if you could see him
Standing there in his jac ket, strong, as light grew dim
I see him, in the mid dle of the past, it‘s grim
Like a reed he’d hand le, bend with fate
The gauge of a man’s slate
|Posted on Tuesday, March 14, 2006 - 06:07 am: ||
This was beautiful, Elizabeth!
If you can't be kind, at least have the decency to be vague.
Never meddle in the affairs of Dragons!
|Posted on Friday, August 25, 2006 - 06:29 pm: ||
I'm um thinking about the FOS, but as usual Michael (I'm lost) lol
What else is new?!
*sits back and watches and reads the musing poems before her**
"If A equals success, then the formula is: A = X + Y + Z, X is work. Y is play. Z is keep your mouth shut."
|Posted on Friday, December 21, 2007 - 06:14 pm: ||
Michael..I notice these posts are well over a year old..so I am curious to know..can we still try these forms and get feedback?
|Posted on Friday, December 21, 2007 - 08:37 pm: ||
yes, we're quite open for business! Please share what you have and we will give that feedback!
If you can't be kind, at least have the decency to be vague. ***
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|Posted on Sunday, December 23, 2007 - 12:12 am: ||
Thanks so much..I shall return with something~Jade